Conclusion to an Essay

This video shows a problem introduction followed by a more appropriate introduction to an essay on why buying a house or renting an apartment is better. The video discusses why the second introduction is better than the first introduction and corrects both grammatical and content errors.

This video shows the editing process. The specific grammar points addressed are relative pronouns and the Passive. The student paragraph is improved by changing compound sentences using "and" to sentences using relative pronouns: who, which, etc. Active sentences are also changed to passive sentences for coherence improvement.

This video shows the process of writing a cause paragraph from an outline. The topic sentence, general specific pattern, transitions, and concluding sentence are discussed. Expanded detail is given in this paragraph to meet the advanced level requirements. The topic of the paragraph is why people carpool or share rides to work.